This is so very poorly written. It serves as a prime example as to why one should avoid writing in the passive voice. The first sentence is oddly worded. To correct sentences like these, ask who or what does the action. Put that word before the verb. In this sentence, ask who or what refers. One way to correct the first sentence would be as follows: Most people know of the "big white house with big white columns" on Alcoa Road.
Each blue check mark denotes a verb in the passive voice. By putting the doer or speaker before the verb, the author could use fewer words and be much clearer. Errors 1-3 denote missing words or words in the wrong form. The fourth mark denotes the passive voice errors in the entire article. The last paragraph seems to suffer from editing fossils.
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